After Life Teaser #1

here is a teaser of my new play "AFTER LIFE" tell me what you think

Scene 1

A figure sits at the lone desk down center. His first lines address the audience.

Duncan

I can barely remember what happened, I was sitting alone at home, staring down the barrel of my father’s pistol, I was about to pull the trigger.

(Pauses, Duncan Stands)

I couldn’t take the pain anymore, the constant antagonizing pain. So I pulled the trigger, everything went dark; I could hear my mother in the background screaming my name Duncan…Duncan. Next thing you know I’m walking through this door

(Duncan Points toward door)

Guess this is hell, funny, thought it would be hotter.